intangible

[gedankespieler]

................this is a bit too much muse to take in in one gulp - suggest you distil.

Yeah, I think I have a tendency to condense things too much. Cheers.

................the repeat of 'sand' and the belaboring of the thought drags the poem down.

Hmm, you think so? With the repetition, I was trying to emphasise how everything is transient, but that transience itself is constant, and that various changes are similar in some respect; everything ends in the same state. I see what you mean though; maybe I could do this in a more elegant manner.