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11-22-2016, 04:44 AM

Thank you Sparkydashforth for your review. I've cut that line that was incomprehensible. I think you're right about it needing to take a more meditative bent. Thanks for the input!

I've posted a revision at the top. Thanks again to everyone for the comments!

Meep meep.

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waiting for the snow - by Bueller - 10-26-2016, 06:11 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by kolemath - 10-26-2016, 06:55 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Bueller - 10-27-2016, 12:12 PM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Achebe - 10-26-2016, 07:52 PM

RE: waiting for the snow - by howls - 10-27-2016, 05:09 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by CRNDLSM - 10-27-2016, 08:54 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by SandyCarroll - 10-30-2016, 04:55 PM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Bueller - 10-31-2016, 11:18 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by shisle07 - 10-30-2016, 11:03 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Bueller - 10-30-2016, 11:50 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Coquette16 - 11-18-2016, 12:50 PM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Bueller - 11-18-2016, 04:17 PM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Sparkydashforth - 11-21-2016, 04:07 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Bueller - 11-22-2016, 04:44 AM

RE: waiting for the snow - by Coquette16 - 11-24-2016, 09:24 AM

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