Dark Waters

[Bunx]

Dark Waters


Heart capsized ... Sweet imagery
No longer drifting.
Further and further away
Swims reality. ... awesome metaphor, but pretty broad. Initially I get a sense of losing a loving and suffering delusions because of that.  

Submerged, discouraged,
Eyes blurred,
Limbs slicing,  .... A little confused here. Is one swimming to the "dark waters?" 
Dark waters
Enticing the unclaimed depths. Very cool imagery 

Mindless pressure
Pulsing
In the mirror
of distortion
surrounding me. Very cool stanza. 

Heart capsized
No longer drifting.
Further and further away
Swims reality. Awesome turn around

Really sweet poem!
I love how brief and concise the images are. Also it gives alot to the readers imagination. One idea would be to do another version and tell the full story of the capsized heart.