Dark Waters

[AlexSharp]

Dark Waters


Heart capsized
No longer drifting.
Further and further away
Swims reality.

Submerged, discouraged,
Eyes blurred,
Limbs slicing,
Dark waters
Enticing the unclaimed depths.

Mindless pressure
Pulsing
In the mirror
of distortion
surrounding me.

Heart capsized
No longer drifting.
Further and further away
Swims reality.

Imagery is nice ! The 'mirror of distortion' depicting the water is really cool. Only advice I really have is correct your grammatical errors like starting every line with a capital. I was taught your grammar in poetry should basically follow regular prose if you're going to use punctuation and capital letters. If you want to keep the capitals I would at least get rid of the punctuation.