Three-Year-Old with Dad

[BecktheDog]

The idea and vision of this poem is fantastic. I think it is an image that most people can relate to and one that evokes strong emotion. My suggestion is to keep developing the poem so that it does not feel so disjointed. I was slightly confused reading it. I think if the poem were too explicit you would lose some of your vision. I think the action of the poem needs to be a little bit clearer though.