11-14-2016, 05:55 AM
I would make the POV a bit more clear. Is it from a child or adult? Your poem seems to have a nostalgic feel in the beginning, but then gives off the essence that the narrator too still chases after the ice cream truck. I love that you chose to write about ice cream trucks, and even how you mentioned the season might be off now- maybe incorporate that into your poem? You could add in something about fall rolling around and the ice cream truck's visits parseling out until it doesn't come around anymore? Just a few ideas. I really enjoyed this