11-10-2016, 10:34 AM
The imagery in this poem is superb. Especially in
"unzipping my skin
allowing you in
i'm entertaining"
If you are able to keep that imagery up through the rest of the poem, I think this poem will improve. The theme is sustained through the poem, but the imagery is not.
"unzipping my skin
allowing you in
i'm entertaining"
If you are able to keep that imagery up through the rest of the poem, I think this poem will improve. The theme is sustained through the poem, but the imagery is not.