indiana vanilla

[Lizzie]

no one warned us we could become this bored become feels a bit off-rhythm -- maybe be, or get
[the young women of the midwestern cornfields] and i feel like this could be integrated better than being in brackets -- comma we young women... comma, perhaps thanks for the ideas on these two lines -- i agree that it doesn't flow as well as it could

       or maybe they did
              and we blanked them out here's where exposition ends. earlier notes, i do find a bit annoying, but they are nits. i like how this is separated, how this ties to white, and how this speaks a lot about the setting (or at least how i tend to judge it)

because their words tasted like yet another Cool Whip white
Jello and Marshmallow salad white -- also, disagree with the earlier, this sounds delish. just don't call it a salad it's salad because you can't call it a casserole, which are also just big jumbles of random things, but heated in an oven
because their laughs were fictional as teenage abstinence white, with that "fictional" note....

....that's a semen joke, in case you didn't catch that (xD). then again, placing it so close to cool whip.... I will never look at Cool Whip the same way again!

because their creased khakis and blonde hair droned on white
of nothing but ranch dressing and choral music white ---- until you get to "choral music", which i have found has such, such, such variety (the example i immediately thought of is this: [Video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G4jeTWheAxA]); so that i would suggest changing that You're right, and that was a lovely clip All I know is that they love their choirs....but, yes, I"ll choose something else.
in syllables as clean as Christian radio white, as far as i know ---- i do wonder, though, how much Christian radio over there plays contemporary Christian (specifically, evangelical) music All, as far as I'm aware. And, yes, it's super white. Some urban areas will have a gospel station. , which i personally think is as shit (and sorta white, or at least the sort of white this deals with -- there's my judgment again) as can be -- here we only have two stations, one playing some contemporary, but mostly talks and such, and the other playing never contemporary, most often classical, sometimes jazz: it's the only classical/jazz station over here, as far as i know, and it's my favorite station overall

and the title is a draw, too. kinda reminds me of the movie vanilla sky, how that's all about illusions -- heh, as if i ever watched it. i saw a short bit on television, looked it up on wikipedia, that's it. I've never seen it either, but that is a nice allusion to illusions! but yeah, this whole piece, lovely

Thanks for the read and the laughs, River