Akathisia

[Mark Cecil]

I've made a few changes as suggested. I'm still not sure whether I'm going to change the title to Akathist as my intention was never to write as a hymn but the fact each line has five syllabiles might give the poem a feel that it is a hymn. I thought about putting in the Greek word for antipsychotics at the start but I thought it was too long. In regards to the "around and around" at the end of each stanza although I'm not totally happy with it I think the poem lacks something without it. I think it works well in the last stanza but it perhaps isn't needed in the others but I want to have each stanza have five lines each so I think I might keep it for now until I think of something better.

Thanks for your feedback it is much appreciated.