waiting for the snow

[kolemath]

we're waiting for the snow to fall quiet
like a poem's beginning is a poem quiet? how? maybe between the title and first line is quiet

awaiting relief from the rain
and the blustery wind
from the slip of rotting leaves these lines work as connected to snow. can't help but this of r. frost. 

from the strain of change this line doesn't add to the poem IMO

we're waiting to trundle
through undulating drifts not sure what this means
across fallow fields i like the adjective, adds a layer of meaning, 
i suppose the stanza is walking through a snowy field?

inward as a daydream
as an icy lake is an icy lake inward? i think of surfaces

i like the poem, a kind of identity as connected to seasons. S4 could bring this out more. thanks for posting