I See Yet

[Achebe]

{FIRST EDITION}
I See Yet

I see us trees
growing to and from one another,
searching for the same light.
Yet you do not see me

I see us stars
Shining in the same sky
bright and indifferent.
Yet you do not see me

I see us drops
thundering from the dark clouds,
pattering on the self-same ground.
Yet you do not see me.

I see us buds
awaiting our evolution,
upon the grey-green fields.
I bloom.
You will see me.



I know this poem may seem superficial and pretentious to some, however it holds great meaning to me. I would earnestly request you to try and put yourself in it and feel what you may relate to. All advice and criticism is welcome, I am open to hard criticism so please do not hold back. I appreciate each post. Thank you.

Why the twist in the last stanza? There's no explanation for the sudden ability to see you. A bloom amongst blooms is a tree amongst trees.

It is when we bloom that we differentiate.

And when trees grow cells differentiate. Two trees are not alike. Neither are two stars, unless you think that Sirius and Polaris are one and the same. To hold out two flowers as being examples of differentiation in contrast to the rest isn't convincing.