10-22-2016, 05:12 PM
{FIRST EDITION}
I See Yet
I see us trees
growing to and from one another,
searching for the same light.
Yet you do not see me
I see us stars
Shining in the same sky
bright and indifferent.
Yet you do not see me
I see us drops
thundering from the dark clouds,
pattering on the self-same ground.
Yet you do not see me.
I see us buds
awaiting our evolution,
upon the grey-green fields.
I bloom.
You will see me.
I know this poem may seem superficial and pretentious to some, however it holds great meaning to me. I would earnestly request you to try and put yourself in it and feel what you may relate to. All advice and criticism is welcome, I am open to hard criticism so please do not hold back. I appreciate each post. Thank you.
I See Yet
I see us trees
growing to and from one another,
searching for the same light.
Yet you do not see me
I see us stars
Shining in the same sky
bright and indifferent.
Yet you do not see me
I see us drops
thundering from the dark clouds,
pattering on the self-same ground.
Yet you do not see me.
I see us buds
awaiting our evolution,
upon the grey-green fields.
I bloom.
You will see me.
I know this poem may seem superficial and pretentious to some, however it holds great meaning to me. I would earnestly request you to try and put yourself in it and feel what you may relate to. All advice and criticism is welcome, I am open to hard criticism so please do not hold back. I appreciate each post. Thank you.
We hold the world but as the world, is it what we see?

