I See Yet
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{FIRST EDITION}
I See Yet

I see us trees
growing to and from one another,
searching for the same light.
Yet you do not see me

I see us stars
Shining in the same sky
bright and indifferent.
Yet you do not see me

I see us drops
thundering from the dark clouds,
pattering on the self-same ground.
Yet you do not see me.

I see us buds
awaiting our evolution,
upon the grey-green fields.
I bloom.
You will see me.



I know this poem may seem superficial and pretentious to some, however it holds great meaning to me. I would earnestly request you to try and put yourself in it and feel what you may relate to. All advice and criticism is welcome, I am open to hard criticism so please do not hold back. I appreciate each post. Thank you.
We hold the world but as the world, is it what we see?
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Messages In This Thread
I See Yet - by mitsuch - 10-22-2016, 05:12 PM
RE: I See Yet - by kolemath - 10-22-2016, 10:18 PM
RE: I See Yet - by mitsuch - 10-22-2016, 10:46 PM
RE: I See Yet - by Achebe - 10-23-2016, 08:39 AM
RE: I See Yet - by mitsuch - 10-23-2016, 03:40 PM
RE: I See Yet - by Achebe - 10-23-2016, 03:48 PM
RE: I See Yet - by QDeathstar - 10-23-2016, 04:22 PM
RE: I See Yet - by billy - 10-23-2016, 06:50 PM
RE: I See Yet - by mitsuch - 10-23-2016, 04:48 PM
RE: I See Yet - by Mark Cecil - 10-24-2016, 06:38 AM
RE: I See Yet - by HaleINthewind - 10-27-2016, 01:23 AM
RE: I See Yet - by Lizzie - 10-28-2016, 12:53 PM
RE: I See Yet - by Krakus - 10-31-2016, 12:35 PM



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