Our Love is Anywhere *second edit*

[Mark Cecil]

This is a really moving and beautiful poem and I can see you've made a big improvement from the previous edits by taking out a lot of the repetition. The only thing I would point out is the line "sleeping with the light on, because our love never sleeps" I think this sounds a bit corny. I wonder if you could think of the light as a metaphor rather than literal e.g. "The light of our love remains, And it will never sleep" I'm just thinking off the top of my head I'm sure you can think of something better.