Kelly
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Overall a strong poem with powerful images. Nice guys finish last. The rhyme is distracting to me though, almost trivializing the severity of the content. I could go line for line but don't know if you want that in novice.

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Kelly - by CRNDLSM - 10-09-2016, 08:58 AM
RE: Kelly - by kolemath - 10-09-2016, 09:35 AM
RE: Kelly - by Bueller - 10-09-2016, 11:18 AM
RE: Kelly - by CRNDLSM - 10-10-2016, 01:19 AM
RE: Kelly - by Reflection - 10-10-2016, 07:21 AM
RE: Kelly - by Mark Cecil - 10-12-2016, 06:08 AM



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