10-04-2016, 07:02 AM
I'll agree with what others have said, the "All-ways Death" does seem a little out of place and confusing. The two lines following it, I actually love.
Its patron saint sat by the church:
A suicide from 1410.
I feel it gives much needed setting to the poem. I'm not sure if this is at all what you were going for, but it makes me picture some old bone-tired man in a dark lonely apartment complex where someone in 1410 next door just committed suicide, in a sad dreary city with a saint sitting outside the church in the rain, sad that he could do nothing about the alluring darkness that drew in the suicidal.
Also, this poem reminds me of that Nietzsche quote, "Stare into the abyss long enough and it will stare into you"
Its patron saint sat by the church:
A suicide from 1410.
I feel it gives much needed setting to the poem. I'm not sure if this is at all what you were going for, but it makes me picture some old bone-tired man in a dark lonely apartment complex where someone in 1410 next door just committed suicide, in a sad dreary city with a saint sitting outside the church in the rain, sad that he could do nothing about the alluring darkness that drew in the suicidal.
Also, this poem reminds me of that Nietzsche quote, "Stare into the abyss long enough and it will stare into you"