Brave Spectator

[Achebe]

It is worth mentioning that I am deeply excited to see this is a community of people who appear to provide amazing and helpful feedback for each other's work. I am really quite sad I haven't found this place before now, but here's my first contribution. Thank you in advance!

It’s easy to be brave from here
Because the mountains are miles away
And I’ve never carried a pack.
 
Three days from now
I’ll crawl halfway up a rockfall
While my bravery stays behind in a grove of aspens.
 
Above my right shoulder
The mountain has me lassoed
By a fishing-pole.

I'll claw my way up that hill—

A signal corps recruit,
Or some great uncoordinated beetle
Looking back now and again
to find my brave spectator
Trembling in the tree line.

Being a bit of a hiker myself, I love this piece.
I like how you're always in control of the metre. I see Leanne's point that 'uncoordinated' is a bit on the wordy side, but it's not bad enough to spoil the line for me.
I also like how you've looped back to the beginning in the last line
That said, the following suggestions:
1. A fishing pole doesn't lasso. So you'd have to go with some other word there (not 'hooked', that'd be cliched)
2. If the personification of bravery is trembling in the shade, then who's climbing with you? the personification of fear? That's not the sense I get from the poem. It might make more sense to replace 'bravery' with 'bluster'. Because you need courage to carry on with you, but you can leave the for-others fake display of courage behind. Or something on those lines.