09-27-2016, 08:26 PM
(09-27-2016, 03:49 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote: is it untitled for a reason? Are you waiting to see what develops? I like how the first paragraphs defense mechanism, the second is escape, and the third is resolution. I would like to see another paragraph maybe of how the authors words help, or how and why you might rebuff violations, because it seems really you want to withdraw instead forever and not just for now. And I like beginning and ending the poem with 'the words', it nicely closes the package.I'm really struggling with a title for this, I struggle with subtly and am having difficulty tacking a name on this that isn't too on the nose. I can see what you're saying about adding to the poem, thanks for the response and the feedback!
