09-23-2016, 12:37 PM
hi. you can definately feel the tension in this poem. It reads like a off color thriller "will he jump or won't he"
the easy thing to do here is to knock you on the rain of dots, and the awkward one word lone breaks.... I'll have to give them the benefit of the doubt be use they seem to build the visual style of the peice... the suspense... I'm not a big fan of the opening lines...
the easy thing to do here is to knock you on the rain of dots, and the awkward one word lone breaks.... I'll have to give them the benefit of the doubt be use they seem to build the visual style of the peice... the suspense... I'm not a big fan of the opening lines...