Goodbye Kiss

[Achebe]

Goodbye to light of day, she’ll pass to other lands
To kiss the skin of those beyond horizon’s end
To shine most bright in final warmth upon cold hands 
As fair as noon or more, still smiles to those who wend...can light of day shine as fair as noon? aren't the same thing? 'wend' needs to have a destination specified.

Should wind be kind, and by good fortune, northern bound
Twould sweep the ash of burnt out sun to place of night ..missing article
Where favored tree she’d seen arise from neath the ground ....doesn't make sense
Who by her light grew tall and lesson neared her height...nor this

The willow weeps against the breeze that passes through
Recalls the beauty light above, with warmth, would breed ...'beauteous'. what would breed...the light?
While grass is stained by tears with none to melt the dew ...missing article.
And soil is barren now with none to nurse the seed ... seeds don't need the sun. they need water, which is there, albeit frozen.

Yet son of sun look up and turn your cheek to sky ...missing article
To let the sun, with one more ray, give kiss goodbye