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[kolemath]

I liked the crooked, cracked panes
that welcomed slivers 
of sun to nudge me
from our bedraggled sheets. doesn't seem very comfortable; bedraggled is a good word but may distract some readers; soiled has some nuance and fits the rhythm better to my reading

I liked the dents in the wall
from the 2 am bluster love bluster, bringing back nature from S1
of old friends and wine.

I'll miss your pointed sigh
when the floorboards creak i like that each stanza contains an image of the place
and I'm alone.

not sure what the title adds..

i think the poem is contained in itself.  interesting images in S1 and 2. i see a dilapidated home, cracks in the windows and dents in the walls speak to the place's falling apart. S3 brings it together, a lover lost, who couldn't stand the crappy dwelling--thus the sigh is pointed--but for whatever reason, maybe alcoholism, the lover left the speaker and the speaker was unwilling to follow, preferring to stay in the hood.

if anything, i can't find a reason to shift from past to present tense. unless the speaker no longer likes them by consequence of the lost lover. here i am talking myself through the interpretation..