09-21-2016, 02:26 PM
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The wooden boards are the pier where I spent large periods of my teenage years. The careful walking is because it was so narrow..I was always afraid to fall in if I didn't walk straight. I couldn't swim. Only half afraid, though.
The bars are symbolism. Of a cage. A metaphorical one, of course.
Thank you for your thoughts!!
(09-21-2016, 02:17 PM)just mercedes Wrote: Terza rima sonnet? Your rhyme and meter all carefully presented, but still that third line is a real mouthful.It was shorter at first but I couldn't make it fit the meter and not sound fragmented..it was sort of a pick 2/3 deal xD but I will work on it!
I'm not sure why the wooden boards, the careful walking, or the bars, are there. I'm missing something.
I enjoyed the read, though, thank you for posting this.
The wooden boards are the pier where I spent large periods of my teenage years. The careful walking is because it was so narrow..I was always afraid to fall in if I didn't walk straight. I couldn't swim. Only half afraid, though.
The bars are symbolism. Of a cage. A metaphorical one, of course.
Thank you for your thoughts!!