09-20-2016, 10:09 AM
I think this works as the whole story, personally, but I can see what the above critic means. I think it's a testament to your skill in creating this domestic thumbnail that we both want more of the story, but I really enjoyed how the seeming physical imperfections of the setting, and how they relate to the character's human experience, told the story themselves, without needing a multitude of detail. Thank you for the read. - Jack xxx
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe