09-20-2016, 10:03 AM
I really enjoyed this piece (I'm responding to Edit 4, by the way); it's an extremely elegant and eloquent evocation of a moment, to which it adds so much depth and fun reflections in its sharp, precise, and memorable metaphors/similes. My only objection is to the word "witting", which feels clumsy. Would "twittering liars" make more sense and flow a little neater. Just a thought. Thank you for the read. - Jack xxx
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe