Who Am I?

[DJesters]

I play both roles.
   I am death and dark,
   I am life and light,

I burn, I build, I blind,
   I clarify, I am doubt,
   I burst with courage,

I call you ugly, I kiss you
   goodnight, I lie to
   myself, I love myself,
   I bury myself, but I
   rise as well.
 

A ten minute freewrite! Critiques, comments, improvements?

This is some good content for a ten minute freewrite, but I think the time you limited yourself to turned this poem into a cliché of sort. With more time invested into this, I think it could become a great "light vs. dark" and "life vs. death" poem, but that comparison has been used so many times. I love the contrasts and comparisons you painted, but the subject is just so over explored to the point where even if the poem was award winning material, I still feel like it would be less just because of the flood of this subject. I think you have something good here, though, in that if you picked a different subject, the poem would be excellent because your way with words is fantastic. I wish you the best!