09-12-2016, 06:19 AM
(09-12-2016, 05:52 AM)dukealien Wrote: @Donald Q. - You're right about L4, it should be made clearer. Thinking on it... Thanks for the good critique.@dukealien, I assumed that you were referring to both you and the inanimate bike as "witting liars," though if there was another implied biker with you then I may have totally missed that.
@Vox_Nihilis - It may be a typo, or you may not have quite got the full blame-casting tangle in the last quatrain (did you mean "biker?") If so, my lines should be made clearer. And thanks for the compliments, not noticing the rhyme scheme is particularly flattering.

