09-12-2016, 05:52 AM
@Donald Q. - You're right about L4, it should be made clearer. Thinking on it... Thanks for the good critique.
@Vox_Nihilis - It may be a typo, or you may not have quite got the full blame-casting tangle in the last quatrain (did you mean "biker?") If so, my lines should be made clearer. And thanks for the compliments, not noticing the rhyme scheme is particularly flattering.
@Vox_Nihilis - It may be a typo, or you may not have quite got the full blame-casting tangle in the last quatrain (did you mean "biker?") If so, my lines should be made clearer. And thanks for the compliments, not noticing the rhyme scheme is particularly flattering.
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