Pride Justified (Quartet)
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(09-09-2016, 10:47 PM)dukealien Wrote:  Capitalizing "[L]aw" could add some richness/ambivalence, probably more than these simple verses can bear.  When I see "Law" capitalized mid-sentence, it evokes Judaic/Mosaic, European (specifically English) Common or statute law, Indian sub-continent Buddhist (karma) or Hindu (wheel), or Sinic (Confucian propriety/Rituals)*.  In ordinary reading the context would establish which, but in short verse the reading of "Law" would set the context for everything else.  (I was thinking statute law, mainly.)

*"[L]aw" does not bring sharia to mind, for me, anyway.

Yes, indeed.  All those other religious and sectarian accumulations...
I guess, reflexively, subconsciously, I think first of Christian.  This is because
I grew up in a Christian environment; and the beliefs that I don't believe in were
predominantly formed by it.

But, changing the subject, I really have to disagree with: "probably more than
these simple verses can bear".  Haven't they engendered this discussion?
While we can certainly imagine more eloquent, stately poems having this affect,
I bet they would all be much longer. Yours possesses the elegance of simplicity.

So... pretty damn cool dude.
                                                                                                                                all this useless beauty... but what the hell, why not?
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Pride Justified (Quartet) - by dukealien - 09-06-2016, 10:31 PM
RE: Pride Justified (Duet?) - by rayheinrich - 09-07-2016, 12:42 PM
RE: Pride Justified (Duet?) - by billy - 09-07-2016, 05:33 PM
RE: Pride Justified (Duet?) - by RiverNotch - 09-07-2016, 05:54 PM
RE: Pride Justified (Quartet) - by dukealien - 09-08-2016, 12:26 AM
RE: Pride Justified (Quartet) - by rayheinrich - 09-08-2016, 05:42 AM
RE: Pride Justified (Quartet) - by RiverNotch - 09-08-2016, 01:27 PM
RE: Pride Justified (Quartet) - by rayheinrich - 09-09-2016, 06:29 AM
RE: Pride Justified (Quartet) - by dukealien - 09-09-2016, 10:47 PM
RE: Pride Justified (Quartet) - by rayheinrich - 09-10-2016, 03:00 AM
RE: Pride Justified (Quartet) - by just mercedes - 09-12-2016, 12:53 PM



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