09-05-2016, 12:35 PM
Summer is fading:
The leaves fall in ones and twos
From trees bordering
The new recreation ground.
In the hollows of afternoons
Young mothers assemble
At swing and sandpit
Setting free their children.
I love Larkin. You have done well here with yours. Stanza 3 is really well done. Larkin would sneeze at stanza 2 b/c he would not need "fuck" in a poem to get his point across. Just saying.
I enjoyed reading this.
The leaves fall in ones and twos
From trees bordering
The new recreation ground.
In the hollows of afternoons
Young mothers assemble
At swing and sandpit
Setting free their children.
I love Larkin. You have done well here with yours. Stanza 3 is really well done. Larkin would sneeze at stanza 2 b/c he would not need "fuck" in a poem to get his point across. Just saying.
I enjoyed reading this.