09-01-2016, 02:39 PM
(09-01-2016, 01:18 PM)Leanne Wrote: Emus are way nastier than ostriches, and they steal Twisties from kids. True story.
Years ago four of us were sitting in a VW by the Pinch River, near the Snowy River in the middle of a wilderness area, when six large emus appeared and surrounded us. They all bent their heads down to peer into the windows, and we all felt definitely menaced! They didn't run away when the car started, but followed us. Nervous laughter. They can kick you to death, or rip out your belly like a 'roo does. Bastard birds.
Got totally sidetracked by the emus. Your poem feels like a romp through styles and symbols, place and time, obeying a cosmic uncertainty principle with sharp wit and satire but still rounding out the journey with beat and heat, and incomplete. 'Rhymes with portal, seems to fit / if it don't then bugger it' I love.