Father, Have I Sinned?

Father, Have I Sinned?

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09-01-2016, 09:20 AM

Re-reading, you might actually be best going with trochees throughout -- a kind of Hiawatha rhythm might work very well here. The first line sets it up for you.

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Father, Have I Sinned? - by crimsonqueen - 08-31-2016, 12:05 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by 71degrees - 08-31-2016, 11:06 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by crimsonqueen - 08-31-2016, 12:29 PM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by makeshift - 08-31-2016, 01:14 PM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by crimsonqueen - 08-31-2016, 07:33 PM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by 71degrees - 09-01-2016, 03:16 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by Achebe - 08-31-2016, 01:48 PM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by rowens - 08-31-2016, 10:01 PM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by crimsonqueen - 09-01-2016, 04:04 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by 71degrees - 09-02-2016, 03:50 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by Lizzie - 09-01-2016, 04:35 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by crimsonqueen - 09-01-2016, 06:10 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by Leanne - 09-01-2016, 08:43 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by crimsonqueen - 09-01-2016, 08:58 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by Achebe - 09-01-2016, 09:05 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by Leanne - 09-01-2016, 09:20 AM

RE: Father, Have I Sinned? - by Achebe - 09-01-2016, 09:43 AM

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