08-31-2016, 06:48 AM
Edit #1
I have a precious picture
on my crowded shelf,
drawn by a former lover,
in which a crown
sits on my head,
a king.
I must study it, Study is an interesting choice of words. Study has a feeling of detachment. It seems too technical a word when trying to describe a break up.
keep it close like my phone,
there on the shelf, by the cordial invitation
to the dance where we shared our last kiss. This stanza does a great job of bringing up those sentimental feelings of having a first love. You paint a picture of losing a first love.
You, having parted from my side,
prefer to erase that past. Why would they prefer to erase the past, or have they?
[b]I think it help to describe why this picture you keep close is so precious. You brought me back to a place back when I first started dealing with the fresh new feelings of love and longing in my adolescence. It reminds me the desperation to not let go of someone who has clearly let go of you. [/b]
I have a precious picture
on my crowded shelf,
drawn by a former lover,
in which a crown
sits on my head,
a king.
I must study it, Study is an interesting choice of words. Study has a feeling of detachment. It seems too technical a word when trying to describe a break up.
keep it close like my phone,
there on the shelf, by the cordial invitation
to the dance where we shared our last kiss. This stanza does a great job of bringing up those sentimental feelings of having a first love. You paint a picture of losing a first love.
You, having parted from my side,
prefer to erase that past. Why would they prefer to erase the past, or have they?
[b]I think it help to describe why this picture you keep close is so precious. You brought me back to a place back when I first started dealing with the fresh new feelings of love and longing in my adolescence. It reminds me the desperation to not let go of someone who has clearly let go of you. [/b]