I am Death-Destroyer of worlds

[SnarlingThroughOurSmiles]

Hi Snarling - you have some nice images there. I particularly liked:
1. 'like confetti...the stars'
2. 'fistfulls of breath'
3. 'hurtling...void'

On the not so good side:
1. I don't see a connection between the Gita allusion of the title and the Greek myth content of the poem. Since Cronos and Zeus did not actually exist, the first allusion doesn't serve to illuminate the second. The proper title for this poem should have a Greek allusion. Otherwise, one can throw in a FIFA 1954 allusion about Ferenc Puskas with equal validity.
2. The narrator is Time, but in Greek myth Time isn't an active deity (sure, Cronos is represented as holding an hourglass or something, but he isn't exactly top dog anymore). So to say things like 'I made the clouds with my laughter' is pretty confusing. Are you talking about a Judaic god now?
3. 'Leviathan' is a noun and there was only one Apollo, who's still alive. The inclusion of Leviathan now makes it a random mishmash of unconnected myths.

Basically, if you're using allusion, you need to be consistent.
If I've made any factual errors in the above, please do let me know.

Hi! Thanks so much for reviewing! The title was actually an allusion to Oppenheimer saying that the creation of the atom bomb reminded him of that quote from the Bhagavad Gita. So I wasn't really trying to quote the Gita so much as I was trying to capture the idea of a human grasping at more power than she ever should have been allowed to have, really. Also the idea of using a FIFA allusion to talk about a Hungarian footballer sounds awesome. I think it's almost always fun to mix metaphors and references and stuff. Brings new life to description.

Also the narrator isn't time. It's me. And the laughter is me laughing at Cronos begging for mercy. And I know it's impossible for me to have created the universe. It was just fun to write about a heady power trip.

And I meant leviathan as an adjective. It can be used as an adjective. And I mean, I didn't really create the universe, so who's to say I can't pretend to have killed Apollo? And I know there's only one, it was just also a fun concept to play with, a bunch of beautiful sun gods dying at my hand. Also Apollo being the stand-in term for all the sun gods.