08-29-2016, 06:37 PM
To An Addict
Don't ask me to feel sorry for you
in your self-induced misery:
you're not stupid, just willfully self-centered.
How many times have you cut off your nose?
Certainly enough times
to create a necklace large enough to supply
a tribe of cannibals.
No, don't give me your justification,
I've heard them all before
and yes it really is that bad,
and (I feel that the verses would flow much better without this little conjunction)
no, you have no control.
The bottom line is
you want to ruin a few more lives
before you do what you need to do.
That is if death doesn't claim you first
causing everyone to sigh with relief.
A sort of desperate anger transpires through every word of this melodic yet raw poem for me. The intensity of the piece is well anticipated by the title being To An Addict as opposed to it being, for example, To An Addiction. The use of a non-traditional form of rhyme ant the singular stanza only strengthens the emotion behind the monologue.
I feel, however, that the structure:
How many times have you cut off your nose?
Certainly enough times
to create a necklace large enough to supply
a tribe of cannibals.
is out of place in a poem with such stark and realistic imagery. This violent a metaphor is usually a staple of romantic writing and this is more of a oratorical piece.
Don't ask me to feel sorry for you
in your self-induced misery:
you're not stupid, just willfully self-centered.
How many times have you cut off your nose?
Certainly enough times
to create a necklace large enough to supply
a tribe of cannibals.
No, don't give me your justification,
I've heard them all before
and yes it really is that bad,
and (I feel that the verses would flow much better without this little conjunction)
no, you have no control.
The bottom line is
you want to ruin a few more lives
before you do what you need to do.
That is if death doesn't claim you first
causing everyone to sigh with relief.
A sort of desperate anger transpires through every word of this melodic yet raw poem for me. The intensity of the piece is well anticipated by the title being To An Addict as opposed to it being, for example, To An Addiction. The use of a non-traditional form of rhyme ant the singular stanza only strengthens the emotion behind the monologue.
I feel, however, that the structure:
How many times have you cut off your nose?
Certainly enough times
to create a necklace large enough to supply
a tribe of cannibals.
is out of place in a poem with such stark and realistic imagery. This violent a metaphor is usually a staple of romantic writing and this is more of a oratorical piece.