The Secret of Love

[71degrees]

This is not a poem. This isn't even an attempt at a poem. If anything it sounds like a proverb, and not a very clever one. I actually question whether people would be "better of admitting" and you give me nothing to sway my opinion.

There's minimalistic, and then there's lazy.

I'll take proverb.  Thank you.

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People would be better off
admitting

they're just not very good
at it

Hi 71 - I'm a big fan of your work otherwise   .... but I thought this piece was too long winded to be the aphorism that you're probably aiming for.
I dislike 'people would be better off' for 'people would' and 'be better' - maybe it's just me, but I don't think those word pairings sound nice. I also don't get the point of the line endings and the gap.
Perhaps one with fewer words would be some variant of:

Everybody's better off admitting
they're not very good at it.

but I still can't help thinking 'so what' to that?

Thanks, Achebe.  I'll try harder.

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People would be better off
admitting

they're just not very good
at it

Ha, I'd like the addition of "some", some people, or even you or I. Some of us are very good at it.

I like the "ha" and I like the "you and I"...

I agree "some" folks are pretty good at it. But only some of the time. No one is that good at it all of the time. And that would be a different poem.  

Thanks, ellajam.