Parted (Edit #1)

Parted (Edit #1)

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08-26-2016, 03:55 PM

I was just wondering what effect you think switching the order of the first two lines would have in terms of the building of suspense. The last line was unexpected. I'm not sure if that was intended. I enjoyed the read.

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Parted (Edit #1) - by UselessBlueprint - 05-03-2016, 10:13 AM

RE: Parted - by Achebe - 05-03-2016, 06:02 PM

RE: Parted - by ellajam - 05-03-2016, 07:27 PM

RE: Parted - by dukealien - 05-04-2016, 10:53 AM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by UselessBlueprint - 05-04-2016, 12:02 PM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by Lizzie - 08-19-2016, 07:58 AM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by UselessBlueprint - 08-19-2016, 11:38 AM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by cvanshelton - 08-20-2016, 11:27 AM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by UselessBlueprint - 08-21-2016, 01:29 PM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by stampede331 - 08-26-2016, 03:55 PM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by SethFiction - 08-26-2016, 11:17 PM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by nikkisto - 08-27-2016, 07:48 PM

RE: Parted (Edit #1) - by djNasty - 08-31-2016, 06:48 AM

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