Ouch!
Its a short poem, not a lot to comment on. It certainly conveys its sentiment, and made me a little sadder. Just adds some attitude to what is otherwise an almost strictly economical poem. I guess my criticism would be that its a bit of a one liner, or at least that's how I read it. I like the enjambment with they're just not very good but then the following line at it seems to suffer for it. I'd like to be convinced that were not too good at the loving business, but maybe thats another poem. Thnx for sharing!
Its a short poem, not a lot to comment on. It certainly conveys its sentiment, and made me a little sadder. Just adds some attitude to what is otherwise an almost strictly economical poem. I guess my criticism would be that its a bit of a one liner, or at least that's how I read it. I like the enjambment with they're just not very good but then the following line at it seems to suffer for it. I'd like to be convinced that were not too good at the loving business, but maybe thats another poem. Thnx for sharing!