She Stands Staring into the Water

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She stands staring into the water ( not a strong opening in my opinion )
at every dock, pier, or bridge, (anywhere
she travels on land) grasping any chance  ( the parenthetical felt very much out of place. but it worked for me, going by theme )
to contemplate the water—feel its lilt,
the comforts of its motions—
to glimpse underneath its surface tension
at the tranquility of fish,
opening and closing their mouths
as if to whisper insider secrets
on the benefits of fins and tails,
on the importance of luxurious armor ( why a line break here? )
—iridescent scales—on the necessity of keeping
like-minded company and attachments
with your species, on the deliciousness ( this line and the two above I enjoy )
of dead things and how to not fear
them, and on how to meditate through the motion
of gills—back and forth. She stands staring into the water,
breathing the way the Buddha taught her—in and out— ( good set of images here )
longing for the life she left behind
the day she crawled out of the water.

Not a deep crit, just some notes.
Mechanically and artistically, I felt it worked well. Thematically, it was fair, but not very hard-hitting.
I wish there was more for me to critique, but as a whole it works just fine. I can't object to your word orders, choices, and sentence structure, but I think the focus is pretty narrow for the amount of words used. I would suggest making parallel points and altering the poem to fit those, or otherwise shortening the poem considerably.