Leviathan

[Southern Scarab]

A creek in spring
sweeping everything away,
in summer dries out.

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Flowing slower in
fall, the winter river soon
completely stops

The symbolism feels like a true haiku, or a Buddhist koan. The meaning is very axiomatic and I like that. No mental ladders to climb, just a clear observation of change.
It's very human to become completely wrapped in ecstatic ideas when our experiences are new, or when we're young, (spring) and then lose motivation with maturity. (summer) At least those were my first thoughts reading through.

My only critique is the repetition of the word 'in'. Including it in the first line does something to the third one that I'm not crazy about, although I can't explain why. How do you feel about 'A spring creek' ?

Also, I'm curious about the syllables in each line. Right now you have 4-7-5, which is so close to the standard 5-7-5 that I couldn't help but wonder if it was intentional.

Loved it, thanks for the read.