She Stands Staring into the Water

[Lizzie]

Also, 'she stands staring into the water' doesn't scan at all to my ear. It's free verse, but even free verse should have some cadence. So perhaps 'she stands staring at the water' or 'she stands and stares into the water' would be better

Since I'm not hearing much of a difference right now, I'm going to use your ideas. Ha! I trust your ears

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