08-17-2016, 08:14 AM
I was happy to take 'burial' as a rhyme for 'fall', which makes the last four lines regular enough for me.
Did you intend iambic pentameter throughout? You miss in lines 4, 6 through to 12, and 14.
Bellerophon survived his fall and lived on as a cripple, wandering the earth, bemoaning his fate and looking for Pegasus.
Marcos was no Hero, he was a murderous dictator, and there's no reason why he should be interred in a Heroes Cemetery.
Bellerophon was no military dictator. I'm not really getting the link between them. That both were unseated at the apex of their power?
Did you intend iambic pentameter throughout? You miss in lines 4, 6 through to 12, and 14.
Bellerophon survived his fall and lived on as a cripple, wandering the earth, bemoaning his fate and looking for Pegasus.
Marcos was no Hero, he was a murderous dictator, and there's no reason why he should be interred in a Heroes Cemetery.
Bellerophon was no military dictator. I'm not really getting the link between them. That both were unseated at the apex of their power?