08-12-2016, 02:57 AM
I wish I could have believed his "they may not mean to" line... but fucking children up seems to be a specialty for some parents.
Anyway, to this poem: What I enjoy most, aside from the beautiful use of allusion, is the sonics. You've used assonance in quite Larkinesque ways (e.g understand, hands, damned) to stitch this poem together and it works very well.
The final lines shift the tone to very dark and make the reader re-evaluate the lighter mood set by the first part of the poem. The irony is heavy, just the way I like it. I am quite disturbed by the notion of "crotchless winter coats" though...
Yes, I think I like this one quite a lot.
Anyway, to this poem: What I enjoy most, aside from the beautiful use of allusion, is the sonics. You've used assonance in quite Larkinesque ways (e.g understand, hands, damned) to stitch this poem together and it works very well.
The final lines shift the tone to very dark and make the reader re-evaluate the lighter mood set by the first part of the poem. The irony is heavy, just the way I like it. I am quite disturbed by the notion of "crotchless winter coats" though...
Yes, I think I like this one quite a lot.
It could be worse