Happiness won't take turns -- edit 1

[Lizzie]

I always find four lines to be more complete (like perhaps that whole forty days symbolism in the bible) but everything seems alright. The rhythm kinda reminds me of one of those longish prosish poems like Whitman or Ginsberg. And yeah, the possessives ain't no issue anymore. A little bugged, too, by the semicolon, but as far as I know, the usage ain't offensive, so nevermind.

Still good stuff. I like how this ties with the next short poem you posted.

How does 3 not contain Biblical symbolism? 3 is the number of perfection! I think that belief goes way back, actually.

Mmmmm, I love me some longish prosish poems I'm actually a huge fan of Ginsberg. I'd love Walt too if he would stop talking about his virile, potent seed for two seconds Which is a strange double standard, because Ginsberg probably talks even more about sex than Walt. 

What do you have against semicolons?

Hmmmmm, a connection. To "Original Narcissism?" Maybe because of the effort to self-perpetuate? I could link them together, I suppose. Do a little collection of epigramish thingies.