A Moment

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Ending it on 'We are Silent' would completely neuter the poem. What would be left? A heron. Doughnuts. Nothing I would remember.

Touché.
I was writing a different poem in my head, instead of commenting on the beautiful one that existed.
When reading the first of it, my mind went into a haiku-like trance. To be brought back to the reality
of human existence was just too painful. BUT, that's the strong part of this poem: the turning point,
the transition. So yes, it would neuter this poem.

Damn, there's just no accounting for readers! 
There are always going to be a few of them who value donuts and herons over human existence.



P.S.   shemthepenman's description is a wonderful poem in its own right.
(Said while realizing that complimenting him (or anyone) isn't that useful when it comes to getting stars.)