07-18-2016, 11:29 PM
the variations sarkozy:-
After lunch I took a rake and swept
the young, clipped leaves off my lawn,
some still clung to branches, neatly drawn
along as though alive, formations kept,
(I think the above has fewer filler words)
through fusillades and volleys while I slept
of hail-shot sleeting down before the dawn -
like the cold fire falling angels wept
fading from the light and falling on.
(OKAY, prolly a bit overdone)
After lunch I took a rake and swept
the young, clipped leaves off my lawn,
some still clung to branches, neatly drawn
along as though alive, formations kept,
(I think the above has fewer filler words)
through fusillades and volleys while I slept
of hail-shot sleeting down before the dawn -
like the cold fire falling angels wept
fading from the light and falling on.
(OKAY, prolly a bit overdone)
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe