07-15-2016, 04:43 AM
Hell yes it's a sonnet. There's no hard and fast rule that demands IP, that's just something that Shakespeare bloke and his cronies decided on and then everyone jumped on his wiggy bandwagon, bloody English! Tetrameter's more rock 'n' roll.
I love everything about this poem except for two metric bumps, one of which I can forgive (S1 L3) because it doesn't interrupt the rhythm particularly. The second is the last line though, and ending with awkward meter is a bit of a disappointment for such an excellent turn. I really wish I could think of a single-syllable thing to chuck on a bbq other than steak, because maybe that's too much of a leap from burger, and have it read "A steak or poem at the least".
I will keep thinking, because this is far too cool to leave alone.
I love everything about this poem except for two metric bumps, one of which I can forgive (S1 L3) because it doesn't interrupt the rhythm particularly. The second is the last line though, and ending with awkward meter is a bit of a disappointment for such an excellent turn. I really wish I could think of a single-syllable thing to chuck on a bbq other than steak, because maybe that's too much of a leap from burger, and have it read "A steak or poem at the least".
I will keep thinking, because this is far too cool to leave alone.
It could be worse