07-13-2016, 10:07 AM
"All that glitters is not gold (Or, Fake It til you Make It)"
AH! Shakespeare's "The Merchant of Venice" Although the two phrases don't have the same meaning exactly. Might want to stick with one. Personally I'd go with the Shakespeare ( Chaucer) quote, as it adds a nice twist on it.
Look at me! I’m the queen of everything!
(And the queen of nothing inside) (this seems a bit awkwardly worded)
It’s amazing what a tight, low-cut crop top can hide.
Come and watch! Watch the manic pixie party princess.
Watch me balance my life on stilettos and shots,
five inches high but I wish I was higher, ‘cause
I can’t laugh any harder.
I can’t laugh any harder, I can’t grin any wider, (maybe move the grin line to the line above as it has more to do with S1 than S2)
I’m drowning in lights, I’m a fucking delight.
I’m the queen of everything and a mess inside,
I’m the queen of everything and a scared little girl inside. (drop one of these two lines or restate, "inside", followed by "inside" doesn't worked sonically, or any other way)
I’m sharp as my eyeliner and bold as my lipstick,
but all my makeup’s waterproof for a reason, 'cause
what’s the point of mascara that can’t mask the fact
that you were crying just now in the back?
So look at me! I’m an introvert’s nightmare,
an introvert’s wet dream,
a queen of self-hatred who can act like a prom queen.
If you dance hard enough, you can fake self-esteem.
If you laugh hard enough, you can fake anything!
I can’t laugh any harder, can’t anyone see?
I’m the queen of everything and masked anxiety.
I’m the queen of false bravado and the counterfeit scene.
A good idea but too much repetition and too much restatement.
Best,
dale
AH! Shakespeare's "The Merchant of Venice" Although the two phrases don't have the same meaning exactly. Might want to stick with one. Personally I'd go with the Shakespeare ( Chaucer) quote, as it adds a nice twist on it.
Look at me! I’m the queen of everything!
(And the queen of nothing inside) (this seems a bit awkwardly worded)
It’s amazing what a tight, low-cut crop top can hide.
Come and watch! Watch the manic pixie party princess.
Watch me balance my life on stilettos and shots,
five inches high but I wish I was higher, ‘cause
I can’t laugh any harder.
I can’t laugh any harder, I can’t grin any wider, (maybe move the grin line to the line above as it has more to do with S1 than S2)
I’m drowning in lights, I’m a fucking delight.
I’m the queen of everything and a mess inside,
I’m the queen of everything and a scared little girl inside. (drop one of these two lines or restate, "inside", followed by "inside" doesn't worked sonically, or any other way)
I’m sharp as my eyeliner and bold as my lipstick,
but all my makeup’s waterproof for a reason, 'cause
what’s the point of mascara that can’t mask the fact
that you were crying just now in the back?
So look at me! I’m an introvert’s nightmare,
an introvert’s wet dream,
a queen of self-hatred who can act like a prom queen.
If you dance hard enough, you can fake self-esteem.
If you laugh hard enough, you can fake anything!
I can’t laugh any harder, can’t anyone see?
I’m the queen of everything and masked anxiety.
I’m the queen of false bravado and the counterfeit scene.
A good idea but too much repetition and too much restatement.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.