The Watch Man -- version 1.1

[REW]

"I read this late last night and was gushing with praise.  I typed up comments with my thumbs (using phone) and then something happened and my feedback wouldn't post.  I do not want to get into all the specifics I said all over again.  Sorry but that is just too tiresome    Let it suffice to say that I love the revised version and I think it is a great poem.  My one suggestion is to bring back the word yellow in your stanza about writing on the lined pads.  I think the yellow is significant because the yellow indicates legal pads, an aspect which is integral to your character IMO."


Damn, I love gushing praise! Thanks for reading and letting me know that you want the legal pads back. I'll see what I can do there. Thanks for the feedback!

  
Yeah I like them being legal pads, but you do not have to say legal pads.  There are multiple ways you could achieve it if you wanted.  And once they are indicated as yellow, you do not need the rules for the lines because the legal pad status implies the rules.

double spaced on black
         yellow ruled 
       tablets – then filed in cold, 
        

double spaced on black

          ruled 
       yellow tablets – then filed in cold, 
          smooth