when a friend asks for crit

[Achebe]

I would suggest bringing her here -- I mean, however obsessively private or delicate her subjects are, since she intends to publish, ie bare everything to the world, anyway....and at least here, she'll have the advantage of a warmer first reception, and way more useful feedback (by strangers, I mean) than, "Sorry, this isn't the kind of stuff we're out to market right now". Plus, if a lot of the material is that sensitive, she could be selective with the posting, too -- I find that when I write a bunch of poems on one outing, just posting one here gets me enough material to edit more objectively the rest, since that one outing usually means one style, one set of guidelines and devices.

As for just your crit, I suppose what's been said. When my friends really prod me, I tend to turn vicious (if deserving of viciousness) -- I mean, vicious without malice, sure, but still vicious -- so, yeah, still working on it. But those suggestions are exactly what I'm working towards, so yeah ----

I would caution against getting her here as a number of publishers and poetry magazines will not consider work that has been posted elsewhere, even on a workshop forum.