07-12-2016, 02:47 PM
"I read this late last night and was gushing with praise. I typed up comments with my thumbs (using phone) and then something happened and my feedback wouldn't post. I do not want to get into all the specifics I said all over again. Sorry but that is just too tiresome 
Let it suffice to say that I love the revised version and I think it is a great poem. My one suggestion is to bring back the word yellow in your stanza about writing on the lined pads. I think the yellow is significant because the yellow indicates legal pads, an aspect which is integral to your character IMO."
Damn, I love gushing praise! Thanks for reading and letting me know that you want the legal pads back. I'll see what I can do there. Thanks for the feedback!
Let it suffice to say that I love the revised version and I think it is a great poem. My one suggestion is to bring back the word yellow in your stanza about writing on the lined pads. I think the yellow is significant because the yellow indicates legal pads, an aspect which is integral to your character IMO."Damn, I love gushing praise! Thanks for reading and letting me know that you want the legal pads back. I'll see what I can do there. Thanks for the feedback!