07-11-2016, 10:30 PM
This was fun to read. I had a problem with this line:
which laid on the ground a short distance apart.
I get its reference to the title but it seems to refer to the scar, or is it the heart, either way I don't get what it is set apart from. I'll keep trying to get it but I'm sure you can clarify this.
Thanks for the read and the dip into the dictionary.
which laid on the ground a short distance apart.
I get its reference to the title but it seems to refer to the scar, or is it the heart, either way I don't get what it is set apart from. I'll keep trying to get it but I'm sure you can clarify this.
Thanks for the read and the dip into the dictionary.
Quote:we were both orphan of impulses
playing to tenebrous lilts
- widening in this vein;
you left me with an oneiric scar,
encircling the illusive entrance to my heart,
which laid on the ground a short distance apart
- this is not a metaphor -
why did you watch the blood thinning from afar?
"I couldn't stand the sight of red liquid"
- I just realised, you were pointing at my lipstick.
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